Say what you mean and mean what you say
Hi Alfonso. Thanks for your latest blog. Once again, you've written with great enthusiasm and passion about your country. I like the way you try to take the reader on a journey with your descriptions.
Sentences like these here really draw the reader in:
Let's go together through the mountains of Columbia...
Pop up your heads and just take a look around. What do you see?
This type of writing sets the scene well and engages the readers by making them feel you are guiding them somewhere interesting. Well done!
LANGUAGE
Sometimes your enthusiasm gets the better of you and it's difficult to understand what you mean. In this blog I'd like to look at three words or expressions you've used which I don't understand or are wrong in this context.
This is what you've written. The words in bold are where I don't understand the sense:
1. Believed or not, with Coffee. I swear of God is true!
2. ...make a living spinning off around the coffee.
3. Music is less festive, just a little bit sorrow but beautiful and sticky.
HOMEWORK
Alfonso, for this homework I would like you to try to have another go at writing these sentences in a clearer way for the reader. Think about what you are trying to say and express it as clearly and simply as you can. Other followers of this blog, I'd like you to help Alfonso. Do you know a better way of saying in English what he has written above? Help each other!
USEFUL VOCABULARY
鈥 draw the reader in - make the reader believe your story.
鈥 sets the scene - describes a situation before you tell a story.
鈥 engages - interests someone.
鈥 gets the better of you - allows you to do something you know is wrong.
鈥 to have another go at - try again.


Comment number 1.
At 22nd Aug 2011, mauricio wrote:Hello Neil,
let me give my ideas on Alonzo's sentences. In the first one I guess he wanted to use the expression believe it or not. Because it's hard to believe that the whole country was built with coffee.
In the second sentence maybe he wanted to say that people's lives in that area are all connected with the growing coffee activity. So they're always surrounded by coffee.
In the third one, I guess he means that the music is so good that it sticks to your mind and you never forget it.
Well, they are just ideas. What do you think Alonzo?
It's nice to participate in the blog. It's great to read it.
See you.
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Comment number 2.
At 22nd Aug 2011, Sergio wrote:Dear Neil,
I'm a teacher (don't worry, I don't teach English), so I see you're simply 芦setting the scene禄 because, in my opinion, you understood very well what the highlighted espressions mean! However, despite I'm not a good student in English, I'm going to play my game!
1) "Even though you cannot believe it"...
2) (To be honest, I don't know, but it's my fault.)
3) How could we say "tormentone" in English? When you hear a riff and can never forget it, like er... Whole Lotta Love: it sounds more and more and more in your brain...
Stop! I've got the better of me!
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Comment number 3.
At 22nd Aug 2011, beatriz wrote:Hi Nail,
As my native language is Spanish I麓ll try to understand the mentioned expressions.
1) "believe it or not, with coffee....." literally and metaphorically Colombia IS coffee and many other things indeed, too.
2) "make a living spinning off....." could mean coffee is vital in their lives and country development and..
3) about the "Sticky music...." it wants to express that once you listen to it, it will remain in your mind for ever.
I麓m trying to guess. Am I right?
Best wishes to you Neil and to Alfonso, Adilson, Wilson, Sonia and the rest of the group. Beatriz.
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Comment number 4.
At 23rd Aug 2011, Tatiana wrote:Hi Neil,
let me suggest an idea about the third sentence in our homework.
It seems to me when Alfonso used the word 鈥渟ticky鈥 he meant that music in these regions is more sentimental and emotional than in neighbouring regions. In this case this word has a different meaning, it doesn鈥檛 mean 鈥渁dhesive鈥.
Thank you for your advice, best wishes
Tatiana
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Comment number 5.
At 24th Aug 2011, sonia durao wrote:Hei Neil,
I think the first question would be:
1) "Believe it or not, with coffee"... I understood perfectly the Alfonso's idea;
2)"make a living spinning off around the coffee" I agree with Mauricio that the most Colombian people's lives are connected with the coffee's production.
3) "Music is ..... and sticky". I guess Alfonso meant that the music is so good than you'll never forget it.
Neil, I'm trying to improve writing in English. Coul you help me? Thanks all of you peope.
Best regards.
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Comment number 6.
At 25th Aug 2011, Emat from Kazakhstan wrote:Hi Neil and everybody!
Thanks for your all advice, Neil.
Alfonso has lived in America a long time, so it was maybe just some American informal phrasal verbs. Among the Russians there is a joke, "I'm sorry, I no speak American" and to be said when a person don't want to show his ignorance of the English language and to do belittle his discomfort in front of foreigner, because nowadays even in ex-USSR it's not a good thing don't to know English. Saying that the homosoveticus tries to show himself as the so big master of English grammar that he notice at once any little "mistakes" of foreigners (meaning all differences of English local various'),of course, it's needless to say that he no speak English at all, and the joke use usually among Russian-American good friends and everybody know it and laugh...I'm so sorry Neil, I translated this my paragraph so long time that it seems I've forgotten what I was going to say about, I'm afraid, I have to end it next time, may be.
:)) Oh, by the way, do you know Neil, what Mark Twain once said about his not so good French??..
Friends! :)) Hi, my friends, well, relax, don't rack your brains over this simple stuff relatively Alfonso's very first phrase (the means of next words are difficult to understand for me, too). I have for you a really true version of it: if I'm not overestimating the importance (what is hardly possible) of my previous comment to Alfonso on his previous entry, then the situation is such that: yes, it was just some old Columbian encoded message addressed to me. On my mentioned comment I did a supposition asking him about his some original author's passages and wrote something like that, "...is it really true story, or it was your fantasy after a good portion of aquaguente??...". So as a wise man consequently modest one he just said with all meekness in his voice: "Believe it or not, with coffee". (Maybe my that light-hearted question sounded a bit disrespectfully, if it's so - I'm sincerely sorry, Alfonso).
Best regards,
Emat
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Comment number 7.
At 26th Aug 2011, ALFONSO wrote:Hi Neil and everyone,
I just back from a short trip to my hometown. Consequently, I want to apologize all of you if I麓m late to answer your comments.
I just want to say pals, Thanks!
Thanks! Neil for your core advice on. Your comments are the real drive behind ours blogs and the fastest way to improve our English skills.
Let麓s go and take a look in the context of my last blog:
麓Once upon a time麓 where a country was built with coffee鈥elieved or not, with coffee. I swear of God, is true! This is not a fairy tale. Let's go together through the mountains of Colombia. Now, we are in the middle of the triangle formed by the three main coffee growers regions in this country.
And now the same out of context:
麓Once upon a time麓 where a country was built with coffee鈥
Believed or not, with coffee. I swear of God, is true! This is not a fairy tale. Let's go together through the mountains of Colombia. Now, we are in the middle of the triangle formed by the three main coffee growers regions in this country.
As you must notice, the first statement was placed out of context as a blog鈥檚 title.
When I wrote 麓Once upon a time麓 where a country was built with coffee鈥β磘he first part of the statement 麓 Once upon a time麓 must call out the reader鈥檚 attention through the metaphorical language .You must make up your mind.麓 Once upon a time麓 must lead the reader through one unreal world.It麓s up to you believe it or not.I swear of God(Please, do not believe my word)..
No one country was built of coffee. Do you remember the Hansel and Gretel, the famous Brothers Grimm fairy tale? They found out a house made with cookies and candies. If you did read that tale- when you was a kid- you believed it. I did; indeed.I麓m a naive person. In Easter Season, in States you 麓ll see Ginger麓s houses. The most beautiful part of the metaphorical language is that you must believe in those stories, with no strings attached. So then, you can smile freely.
When I wrote my country Colombia麓 was built with coffee麓, I was using metaphorical language, meaning the economy, the culture, the roots; all around my country was related with coffee and the folk鈥檚 麓spin of麓 around it. 麓Spinning off麓 was used just to explain folks make a living, derive all, making ends meet around and with coffee beans.
Smile
if your heart is aching
Smile...
All the best,
Alfonso.
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Comment number 8.
At 27th Aug 2011, ALFONSO wrote:Hi Beatriz,Mauricio,Sergio,Emat,Tatiana and Sonia
Thanks for your comments.I麓m pleased to hear from you.
Beatriz:Yes.You are right.The adjetive Sticky was used in my last blog in a closer connotation with the word music, meaning the music 麓are always in my mind麓as the Willy Nelson song...the music stay 麓on麓...like a 麓mantra麓..is so 麓good麓you never forget..
Tatiana:The connotation was similar to ... 谩dhesive麓in your mind....(metaphorical language)
Etan:lol:)..believed it or not.....was not 麓my fantasy after a good bottle of 麓aguardiente麓......
Sergio:麓Torment麓music.Should be better but with a mental connotation.
Mauricio:You are 麓on the ball麓.
Sonia:You are 麓on the ball 麓
Thanks again everyone for your time.
All the best,
Alfonso.
PD:Did you pals ,ever heard the song Smile? Performed by Michael Jackson &Charles Chaplin.Just take a look on that song.
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Comment number 9.
At 28th Aug 2011, Tatiana wrote:Hi Alfonso,
You are quite right; the song is worth listening and taking it on board. Pals, smile! ;-)
Tatiana
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Comment number 10.
At 28th Aug 2011, ALFONSO wrote:Hi Tatiana,
I told you.麓sticky麓song is 麓Smile麓.
All the best,
Alfonso
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Comment number 11.
At 28th Aug 2011, Emat from Kazakhstan wrote:Hi Alfonso!
Oh no, what a disappointment: I thought you are one of our men in Colombia! Well, so be it.Tell me please better still, do you think to write something else as a Student blogger? I don't why, maybe it's all things initial went somehow in a little wrong way, but, it seemed to me you came here to say something special...
Take care,
Emat
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Comment number 12.
At 28th Aug 2011, Emat from Kazakhstan wrote:It's me again, just to correct this my grammar mistake: "I don't know why" - not "I don't why".
All the best
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Comment number 13.
At 30th Aug 2011, ALFONSO wrote:Hi Emat from Kazakhstan,
First and foremost I just want to say Thanks for your comments on my previous entries.Those, with no strings attached ,honor me .
You are far away from Colombia, and your country looks unknown ,as your culture and language sound strange and become a puzzle for me.
However,the web allow the people to meet every day ,chat in a daily manner with confidence and feel that our pal is closer and his friendship is growing every day.
I just want to say Emat,that you have a friend in this country and;indeed,enjoyed to read your comments.
All the best,
Alfonso
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Comment number 14.
At 24th Sep 2011, ajka wrote:Hi Neil,
Am from Somalia, this phrase means Colombia is a country familiar with coffee, all people live in Colombia mostly they were agricultural or farmers, depending on what they harvested from their garden, despite most of them were planted Coffee, exported to other countries, for getting money income to their country
thanks.
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